Comments for adelaide sprawls http://blogopera.wordpress.com a blogopera for our times Thu, 07 Aug 2008 23:14:44 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=MU Comment on Airport, Sunday night, seven thirty (pm) by Zoe http://blogopera.wordpress.com/2008/07/11/airport-sunday-night-seven-thirty-pm/#comment-1911 Zoe Mon, 14 Jul 2008 10:03:04 +0000 http://blogopera.wordpress.com/?p=29#comment-1911 Oooh, my fave was <em>"the pole she had not leaned against"</em> Lovely. Oooh, my fave was “the pole she had not leaned against”

Lovely.

]]> Comment on Airport, Sunday night, seven thirty (pm) by Deborah http://blogopera.wordpress.com/2008/07/11/airport-sunday-night-seven-thirty-pm/#comment-1910 Deborah Sat, 12 Jul 2008 07:49:02 +0000 http://blogopera.wordpress.com/?p=29#comment-1910 <blockquote>All of them - the cigarette, the brunette, the blonde - long, straight and increasingly lined.</blockquote> Loved this line. <blockquote>jackets that weren’t tasselled or denim, but could have been</blockquote> And this one. Somehow it gave me an intense visual impression of these women. And for some reason, I thought I was reading about women before I even got to this line. <blockquote>the women glanced at their watches</blockquote> So you had lots of very good signals worked in there, all completely unobtrusively. Fantastic writing.

All of them - the cigarette, the brunette, the blonde - long, straight and increasingly lined.

Loved this line.

jackets that weren’t tasselled or denim, but could have been

And this one. Somehow it gave me an intense visual impression of these women. And for some reason, I thought I was reading about women before I even got to this line.

the women glanced at their watches

So you had lots of very good signals worked in there, all completely unobtrusively. Fantastic writing.

]]> Comment on Airport, Sunday night, seven thirty (pm) by firstperson thirdcat » I can’t do the washing, because the dog is in the laundry with a bone http://blogopera.wordpress.com/2008/07/11/airport-sunday-night-seven-thirty-pm/#comment-1909 firstperson thirdcat » I can’t do the washing, because the dog is in the laundry with a bone Fri, 11 Jul 2008 03:18:32 +0000 http://blogopera.wordpress.com/?p=29#comment-1909 [...] her writing discipline inspired me to do more with my thoughts than just think them). So, I started writing again. Just a little something while the boys watched ABC Kids. [...] [...] her writing discipline inspired me to do more with my thoughts than just think them). So, I started writing again. Just a little something while the boys watched ABC Kids. [...]

]]> Comment on The turning point by Cheryl Hagedorn http://blogopera.wordpress.com/2007/05/05/the-turning-point/#comment-1394 Cheryl Hagedorn Tue, 25 Sep 2007 21:58:31 +0000 http://blogopera.wordpress.com/2007/05/05/the-turning-point/#comment-1394 Hi. I have a blog about blooks and came here in a rather circuitous way based on a search for the word blook (believe it or not). I <a href="http://blooking.blogspot.com/2007/09/color-me-curious-blogopera.html" rel="nofollow">posted</a> about what you're doing here. I thought you might want to comment on what I wrote and clarify. Best of luck. Hi. I have a blog about blooks and came here in a rather circuitous way based on a search for the word blook (believe it or not). I posted about what you’re doing here. I thought you might want to comment on what I wrote and clarify. Best of luck.

]]> Comment on Green knickers and pink sheets by realistic oil paintings http://blogopera.wordpress.com/2007/02/21/green-knickers-and-pink-sheets/#comment-1056 realistic oil paintings Fri, 10 Aug 2007 05:56:35 +0000 http://blogopera.wordpress.com/2007/02/21/green-knickers-and-pink-sheets/#comment-1056 I’m sorry for my incapacity to read between the lines but I’m trying so hard to see what the point of this story is. If it’s simply about what to do in a small place at a short time then the writer could have chosen a more interesting topic than this slow and not-so-romantic theme. Not that I’m into creative writing but considering how small and how slow the setting are the story should have been past-pacing and totally interesting rather than a blow by blow account of the actions and thoughts of the characters. I’m sorry for my incapacity to read between the lines but I’m trying so hard to see what the point of this story is. If it’s simply about what to do in a small place at a short time then the writer could have chosen a more interesting topic than this slow and not-so-romantic theme. Not that I’m into creative writing but considering how small and how slow the setting are the story should have been past-pacing and totally interesting rather than a blow by blow account of the actions and thoughts of the characters.

]]> Comment on How do you read a blogopera? by Cheryl Hagedorn http://blogopera.wordpress.com/how-do-you-read-a-blogopera/#comment-950 Cheryl Hagedorn Sun, 29 Jul 2007 18:51:02 +0000 http://blogopera.wordpress.com/how-do-you-read-a-blogopera/#comment-950 A couple of things. This blogopera thing excites me! I really need to come back when I've more time. But I just sent your blog's address to a fellow over at <a>The Germaine Truth</a> which is also a fiction project, emphasis on project. Instead of all sorts of characters like you have, they have a town - a map, city hall, newspaper, etc. The two projects seem somewhat similar to my mind. Thanks for awakening thoughts. It happens too seldom. A couple of things. This blogopera thing excites me! I really need to come back when I’ve more time. But I just sent your blog’s address to a fellow over at The Germaine Truth which is also a fiction project, emphasis on project. Instead of all sorts of characters like you have, they have a town - a map, city hall, newspaper, etc. The two projects seem somewhat similar to my mind. Thanks for awakening thoughts. It happens too seldom.

]]> Comment on Green knickers and pink sheets by Music http://blogopera.wordpress.com/2007/02/21/green-knickers-and-pink-sheets/#comment-683 Music Tue, 03 Jul 2007 03:50:46 +0000 http://blogopera.wordpress.com/2007/02/21/green-knickers-and-pink-sheets/#comment-683 I really like this story. I’ve always been drawn to stories that can say what they need to in a very small space. It’s like a little magic trick the way they are able to make such a little say so much. For myself, I would have liked to see more development of Nina and Ethan. It isn’t entirely clear who Nina is, what sort of person she is. Clearly she has some issues with the new neighbor – she seems to want to mother her – but what stimulates this mothering impulse in her? Is it because the new neighbor is somehow different from others in the neighborhood, doesn’t fit in and Nina wants to help make her like the rest of them? Is it because Nina recognizes something in this neighbor that she herself had to deal with once? Is Nina doing this simply because she thinks it’s the “right” thing to do, or is she trying in some way to impress the neighbor? I really like this story. I’ve always been drawn to stories that can say what they need to in a very small space. It’s like a little magic trick the way they are able to make such a little say so much. For myself, I would have liked to see more development of Nina and Ethan. It isn’t entirely clear who Nina is, what sort of person she is. Clearly she has some issues with the new neighbor – she seems to want to mother her – but what stimulates this mothering impulse in her? Is it because the new neighbor is somehow different from others in the neighborhood, doesn’t fit in and Nina wants to help make her like the rest of them? Is it because Nina recognizes something in this neighbor that she herself had to deal with once? Is Nina doing this simply because she thinks it’s the “right” thing to do, or is she trying in some way to impress the neighbor?

]]> Comment on Yvette and Pip: New Year’s Eve (1996) by fifi http://blogopera.wordpress.com/2006/05/30/yvette-and-pip-new-years-eve-1996/#comment-646 fifi Tue, 26 Jun 2007 07:49:18 +0000 https://blogopera.wordpress.com/2006/05/30/yvette-and-pip-new-years-eve-1996/#comment-646 I just burnt the darn dinner. Compelling! I just burnt the darn dinner.

Compelling!

]]> Comment on The turning point by Pavlov's Cat http://blogopera.wordpress.com/2007/05/05/the-turning-point/#comment-243 Pavlov's Cat Sat, 05 May 2007 08:56:05 +0000 http://blogopera.wordpress.com/2007/05/05/the-turning-point/#comment-243 'Like the cardigan she was wearing was a perfect fit, except for the sleeves, and so she’d made a cuff which was four rolls thick.’ Hey! ‘Like the cardigan she was wearing was a perfect fit, except for the sleeves, and so she’d made a cuff which was four rolls thick.’

Hey!

]]> Comment on The turning point by firstperson thirdcat » Productive use of grumpiness http://blogopera.wordpress.com/2007/05/05/the-turning-point/#comment-242 firstperson thirdcat » Productive use of grumpiness Sat, 05 May 2007 08:08:32 +0000 http://blogopera.wordpress.com/2007/05/05/the-turning-point/#comment-242 [...] when I came back from Ikea, I wrote this. It’s not entirely semi-autobiographical. [...] [...] when I came back from Ikea, I wrote this. It’s not entirely semi-autobiographical. [...]

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